Evolution MR Petition Created
Originally posted by JRock
If you want to be illiterate, sure, you could add an apostrophe where it's not needed, such as in the word "gizmos" or you could also write "#'s" instead of "numbers" (notice the lack of apostrophe there as well). Oh wait, you did. You definitely need to read up on proper use of that punctuation mark since you got it wrong just about every time you used it in your writing. ("it's", "years", etc)
I don't even agree with the wording of a lot of the petition but here's one attempt to clean it up at least a little bit. I started out trying to bold the changes but there are several things that had to be removed and it's not possible to show removed text so the editing of this is not exactly correct. If I were writing to a major company (even if their product build quality is sub-par that doesn't mean you can use poor grammar or informal writing style) I wouldn't word it this way, but here you go.
To: Mitsubishi Motors North America, Inc.
Mitsubishi Motors North America, Inc.
We have been reading and hearing about the possibility of the Evolution MR coming to the US Domestic Market (USDM) by year's end. Topics regarding the Evolution MR have generated a lot of interest on Mitsubishi enthusiast Internet forums. Most everyone is in agreement that this is the type of car Mitsubishi should have brought to the USDM last year.
The USDM Evolution VIII is already an awesome car but the thought of the more potent Evolution MR coming here has many car enthusiasts drooling. There are many buyers who don't currently own Mitsubishi cars that are waiting for just such a car to be available. The Evolution MR is the car that will bring these buyers to your dealerships and hopefully give Mitsubishi loyal customers for life.
A lot of people that bought the STi went for the higher performance numbers and the extra features not found in the USDM Evolution VIII. To gain back marketshare from that sort of buyer the Evolution MR needs to arrive here this year before Subaru has time to gear up a response. If the Evolution MR is already on its way to the US, consider this petition as proof that there is indeed a great deal of interest in the MR, and that bringing it here will be a profitable decision.
Sincerely,
The Undersigned
I'd also recommend replacing words like "awesome" and "drooling". If you want to be REALLY formal, don't use any contractions. (for example "don't" becomes "do not")
If you want to be illiterate, sure, you could add an apostrophe where it's not needed, such as in the word "gizmos" or you could also write "#'s" instead of "numbers" (notice the lack of apostrophe there as well). Oh wait, you did. You definitely need to read up on proper use of that punctuation mark since you got it wrong just about every time you used it in your writing. ("it's", "years", etc)
I don't even agree with the wording of a lot of the petition but here's one attempt to clean it up at least a little bit. I started out trying to bold the changes but there are several things that had to be removed and it's not possible to show removed text so the editing of this is not exactly correct. If I were writing to a major company (even if their product build quality is sub-par that doesn't mean you can use poor grammar or informal writing style) I wouldn't word it this way, but here you go.
To: Mitsubishi Motors North America, Inc.
Mitsubishi Motors North America, Inc.
We have been reading and hearing about the possibility of the Evolution MR coming to the US Domestic Market (USDM) by year's end. Topics regarding the Evolution MR have generated a lot of interest on Mitsubishi enthusiast Internet forums. Most everyone is in agreement that this is the type of car Mitsubishi should have brought to the USDM last year.
The USDM Evolution VIII is already an awesome car but the thought of the more potent Evolution MR coming here has many car enthusiasts drooling. There are many buyers who don't currently own Mitsubishi cars that are waiting for just such a car to be available. The Evolution MR is the car that will bring these buyers to your dealerships and hopefully give Mitsubishi loyal customers for life.
A lot of people that bought the STi went for the higher performance numbers and the extra features not found in the USDM Evolution VIII. To gain back marketshare from that sort of buyer the Evolution MR needs to arrive here this year before Subaru has time to gear up a response. If the Evolution MR is already on its way to the US, consider this petition as proof that there is indeed a great deal of interest in the MR, and that bringing it here will be a profitable decision.
Sincerely,
The Undersigned
I'd also recommend replacing words like "awesome" and "drooling". If you want to be REALLY formal, don't use any contractions. (for example "don't" becomes "do not")
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Oy Vey!!
Originally posted by ExoByte
Those are my thoughts exactly. I couldn't sign such a poorly written petition and expect Mitsubishi to take it seriously.
Those are my thoughts exactly. I couldn't sign such a poorly written petition and expect Mitsubishi to take it seriously.
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http://www.roadandtrack.com/article....rticle_id=1254
I'm not sure if that article has already shown up on the site, but I didn't see it, and you can't search for MR (I know there has been tons of talk about the MR in plenty of other threads)...
I'm not sure if that article has already shown up on the site, but I didn't see it, and you can't search for MR (I know there has been tons of talk about the MR in plenty of other threads)...
Last edited by Narcisse91; Apr 13, 2004 at 12:04 PM.
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